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Yukili Editing Essay's Grammar:(i'm not good at grammar, thus maybe my editing is wrong) The novel, “ Of Mice and Men ” , shows how people were lenient about some killing at 1930s. In the novel, “ __Of Mice and Men ” __, by John Steinbeck, the author shows his thinking through the characters in the novel. Some Characters, such as Slim, Carlson, and Curley reflect the author’s thinking that killing is acceptable.

Slim is one of the characters who think some killing, which can protect others, is acceptable. “Nine of’em. I drowned four of 'em right off. She couldn't feed that many." (p.35)  Slim kills 4 puppies to protect mother dog and other 5 puppies. 4 of them can be harmful and everybody including themselves because their mother cannot feed that much, and the puppies also can die because they cannot eat that much as they need. Thus, Slim kills 4 puppies at night. This shows that Slim accepts killing which can protect others. To not harm the mother dog and other 5 puppies, 4 puppies are sacrificed. By sacrificing small number, everyone else can survive. Therefore, Slim doesn’t stop at thinking about killing them, he eventually kills puppies. Through Slim’s behavior, Steinbeck shows his thinking about acceptable killing.  Carlson is another character who thinks killing, which could be benefit for the victim, is acceptable. “The way I’d shoot him, he wouldn’t feel anything. I’d put the gun right here.” (p.45) Candy’s old dog is feeling pain because of the disease he has. The dog has no teeth, and feeling pain because of the rheumatism. Carlson suggests Candy to kill the dog, but when Candy says he can’t, he tells he is going to shoot the dog behind its neck which won’t give it any pain. Killing the old dog won’t give any pain at the moment, and it will stop the dog’s pain which will occur in the future. Carlson thinks killing the dog is actually benefit for the dog. Also, for the last concern, Carlson kills the dog without any pain. Thereupon, Carlson’s behavior and his last consideration for the dog are the reflection of Steinbeck’s idea of killing.  Unlike other characters who think killing for others is acceptable, Curley accepts killing which is actually for himself. (The order not right) Curley’s killing is acceptable as others’ but it is acceptable for other way. “ I'm gonna shoot the guts outa that big bastard myself, even if I only got one hand. I'm gonna get 'im." (p.98) <span style="font-family: 'Malgun Gothic'; font-size: 18pt; mso-fareast-language: KO; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Malgun Gothic';"> when people find out that Lennie killed Curley’s wife’s dead body, Curley gets mad. However, he is not mad about his wife’s death; he just gets mad because of Lennie. His hatred toward Lennie explodes when he figure out that Lennie touched his own property. Thus, even Slim says Curley has to stay with his wife, he refuses to stay with the dead body, and he actually goes to kill Lennie. He wills that he can kill Lennie with enormous pain that he can give to Lennie by shooting Lennie’s guts which could be very painful, and as time goes, the pain will become harder, and harder. Even though the purpose of killing was totally different from other characters, Curley also receives the idea of acceptable killing. His willing to kill Lennie is for ostentation of his power, and for punishing the person who touched his own property. He is very radical person who wants to kill Lennie. However, he accepts killing of Lennie, while he doesn’t accept Lennie’s killing. This shows that Curley only accepts his killing, not other’s which damage his reputation. Although this seems to be very selfish, but it still reflects Steinbeck’s thinking. <span style="font-family: 'Malgun Gothic'; font-size: 18pt; mso-fareast-language: KO; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Malgun Gothic';"> In conclusion, Slim, Carlson, and Curley are the characters who remarkably reflect Steinbeck’s thinking. Steinbeck shows his idea of killing which is that some killing can be justified. Slim and Carlson kills dogs for protection of others, and also for not harming the victims. Unlike Slim and Carlson, Curley is radical person who is willing to kill somebody who damages his reputation and showing off his power. However, even though Slim, Carlson, and Curley’s idea and purpose of the killing are different, all of them think killing is acceptable. Through these characters’ quotes and behaviors, Steinbeck’s conception of killing is receivable, is shown.

** Yukixin's Editing Meaning **

The novel, Of Mice and Men, shows how people were lenient about some killing at 1930s. In the novel, __Of Mice and Men__, by John Steinbeck, the author shows his thinking through the characters in the novel. Some Characters, such as Slim, Carlson, and Curley reflect the author’s thinking that killing is acceptable. (I can easily understand what you try to say)

(You can add the transaction words to make the paragraphs connected) Slim is one of the characters who think some killing, which can protect others, is acceptable. “Nine of’em. I drowned four of 'em right off. She couldn't feed that many." (p.35)( (nice evidence) Slim kills 4 puppies to protect mother dog and other 5 puppies. 4 of them can be harmful and everybody including themselves because their mother cannot feed that much, and the puppies also can die because they cannot eat that much as they need. Thus, Slim kills 4 puppies at night. This shows that Slim accepts killing which can protect others. To not harm the mother dog and other 5 puppies, 4 puppies are sacrificed. By sacrificing small number, everyone else can survive. Therefore, Slim doesn’t stop at thinking about killing them, he eventually kills puppies. (Those above are the plots happened in the novel, and you should write in past tense) Through Slim’s behavior, Steinbeck shows his thinking about acceptable killing.  (transaction words) Carlson is another character who thinks killing, which could be benefit for the victim, is acceptable. “The way I’d shoot him, he wouldn’t feel anything. I’d put the gun right here.” (p.45) Candy’s old dog is feeling pain because of the disease he has. The dog has no teeth, and feeling pain because of the rheumatism. Carlson suggests Candy to kill the dog, but when Candy says he can’t, he tells he is going to shoot the dog behind its neck which won’t give it any pain. Killing the old dog won’t give any pain at the moment, and it will stop the dog’s pain which will occur in the future. Carlson thinks killing the dog is actually benefit for the dog. Also, for the last concern, Carlson kills the dog without any pain. (The same as your last paragraph, you should use past tense to tell the plot that happened in the novel) ideration for the dog are the reflection of Steinbeck’s idea of killing.

Unlike other characters who think killing for others is acceptable, (Curly also thought that killing is acceptable, what does they think differently) Curley accepts killing which is actually for himself. Curley’s killing is acceptable as others’ but it is acceptable for other way. “I'm gonna shoot the guts outa that big bastard myself, even if I only got one hand. I'm gonna get 'im." (p.98) (This quotation cannot exactly show what Curly was mad at, find another strong quotation) When people find out that Lennie killed Curley’s wife’s dead body, Curley gets mad. However, he is not mad about his wife’s death, he just gets mad because of Lennie. His hatred toward Lennie explodes when he figure out that Lennie touched his own property. Thus, even Slim says Curley has to stay with his wife, he refuses to stay with the dead body, and he actually goes to kill Lennie. He wills that he can kill Lennie with enormous pain that he can give to Lennie by shooting Lennie’s guts which could be very painful, and as time goes, the pain will become harder, and harder. Even though the purpose of killing was totally different from other characters, Curley also receives the idea of acceptable killing. His willing to kill Lennie is for ostentation of his power, and for punishing the person who touched his own property. He is very radical person who wants to kill Lennie. However, he accepts killing of Lennie, while he doesn’t accept Lennie’s killing. This shows that Curley only accepts his killing, not other’s which damage his reputation. Although this seems to be very selfish, but it still reflects Steinbeck’s thinking. In conclusion, Slim, Carlson, and Curley are the characters who remarkably reflect Steinbeck’s thinking. Steinbeck shows his idea of killing which is that some killing can be justified. Slim and Carlson kill dogs for protection of others, and also for not harming the victims. (Who are the others and victims, say that clearly to make the reader understand better) Unlike Slim and Carlson, Curley is radical person who is willing to kill somebody who damages his reputation and showing off his power. However, even though Slim, Carlson, and Curley’s idea and purpose of the killing are different, all of them think killing is acceptable. Through these characters’ quotes and behaviors, Steinbeck’s conception of killing is receivable, is shown.

** Agatha's editing of meaning ** The novel, “ Of Mice and Men ”, shows how people were lenient about some killing at 1930s. In the novel, “Of Mice and Men”, by John Steinbeck, the author shows his thinking through the characters in the novel. Some Characters, such as Slim, Carlson, and Curley reflect the author’s thinking that killing is acceptable. (I **think here is an attractive hook and funny topic, maybe more background info**.)

Slim is one of the characters who think some killing, which can protect others, is acceptable. “Nine of’em. I drowned four of 'em right off. She couldn't feed that many." (p.35) Slim kills 4 puppies to protect mother dog and other 5 puppies. 4 of them can be harmful and everybody including themselves ， because their mother cannot feed that much, and the puppies also can die because they cannot eat that much as they need. Thus, Slim kills 4 puppies at night. This shows that Slim accepts killing which can protect others. To not harm the mother dog and other 5 puppies, 4 puppies are sacrificed. By sacrificing small number, everyone else can survive. Therefore, Slim doesn’t stop at thinking about killing them, he eventually kills puppies. Through Slim’s behavior, Steinbeck shows his thinking about acceptable killing. (**also can connect the death of dog and Lennie, Slim is a push reason to push Candy didn’t save the dog, and push George kill Lennie by himself**__)__ Carlson is another character who thinks killing, which could be benefit for the victim, is acceptable. “The way I’d shoot him, he wouldn’t feel anything. I’d put the gun right here.” (p.45) Candy’s old dog is feeling pain because of the disease he has. The dog has no teeth, and feeling pain because of the rheumatism. Carlson suggests Candy to kill the dog, but when Candy says he can’t, he tells he is going to shoot the dog behind its neck which won’t give it any pain. Killing the old dog won’t give any pain at the moment, and it will stop the dog’s pain which will occur in the future. Carlson thinks killing the dog is actually benefit for the dog. Also, for the last concern, Carlson kills the dog without any pain. Thereupon, Carlson’s behavior and his last consideration for the dog are the reflection of Steinbeck’s idea of killing.

Unlike other characters who think killing for others is acceptable, Curley accepts killing which is actually for himself. Curley’s killing is acceptable as others’ but it is acceptable for other way. “I'm gonna shoot the guts outa that big bastard myself, even if I only got one hand. I'm gonna get 'im." (p.98) when people find out that Lennie killed Curley’s wife’s dead body, Curley gets mad. However, he is not mad about his wife’s death; he just gets mad because of Lennie. His hatred toward Lennie explodes when he figure out that Lennie touched his own property. Thus, even Slim says Curley has to stay with his wife, he refuses to stay with the dead body, and he actually goes to kill Lennie. He wills that he can kill Lennie with enormous pain that he can give to Lennie by shooting Lennie’s guts which could be very painful, and as time goes, the pain will become harder, and harder. Even though the purpose of killing was totally different from other characters, Curley also receives the idea of acceptable killing. His willing to kill Lennie is for ostentation of his power, and for punishing the person who touched his own property. He is very radical person who wants to kill Lennie. However, he accepts killing of Lennie, while he doesn’t accept Lennie’s killing. This shows that Curley only accepts his killing, not other’s which damage his reputation. __Although this seems to be very selfish, but it still reflects Steinbeck’s thinking.__ __ （ ** I think killing Lennie by George is acceptable, but not by Curley. Remember, Lennie was killed by George ** ） __

In conclusion, Slim, Carlson, and Curley are the characters who remarkably reflect Steinbeck’s thinking. Steinbeck shows his idea of killing which is that some killing can be justified. Slim and Carlson kills dogs for protection of others, and also for not harming the victims. Unlike Slim and Carlson, Curley is radical person who is willing to kill somebody who damages his reputation and showing off his power. However, even though Slim, Carlson, and Curley’s idea and purpose of the killing are different, all of them think killing is acceptable. Through these characters’ quotes and behaviors, Steinbeck’s conception of killing is receivable, is shown. (**I think the killing by there characters are different, maybe give some changes to contrast**)


 * Topic:** Does John Steinbeck think killing is acceptable?


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">__Introduction:__ **


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Background Information: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Slim, Carlson George are the people who had experienced killing. They show Steinbeck's thinking.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Hook: ** <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">The novel, Of Mice and Men, shows how people were lenient at 1930s.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Thesis Statement: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> In the novel "OF MICE AND MEN" John Steinbeck shows killing is acceptable through the characters in the novel. Some characters, such as Slim, Carlson, and Curley reflect his thinking that killing is acceptable.

1. Slim 2. Carlson 3. Curley

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">**<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">__Body Paragraph 1:__ **


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Topic Sentence: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Slim is one of the characters who thinks some killing, which can protect others, is acceptable.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Point: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Slim thinks killing is acceptable


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Evidence: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> "Nine of'em. I drowned four of 'em right off. She couldn't feed that many." (p.35)


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Explanation: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Slim kills 4 puppies to protect the mother dog and other 5 puppies. 4 of them can be harmful and dangerous to everybody including themselves because their mother cannot feed that many, and puppies also can die because they cannot eat that much as they need. Thus Slim kills 4 puppies at night.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Connection: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> This shows that Slim accept killing which can protect others. To not harm the mother dog and other 5 puppies, 4 puppies are sacrificed. By sacrificing small number, everyone else can survive. Therefore, Slim doesn't stop at thinking, he eventually kills puppies.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Conclusion/Transition Sentence: ** <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Through his behavior, Steinbeck shows his thinking about acceptable killing.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">__Body Paragraph 2:__ **


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Topic Sentence: ** <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Carlson is another character who thinks killing, which could be benefit for the victim, is acceptable.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Point: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Carlson thinks killing is acceptable


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Evidence: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> "The way I'd shoot him, he wouldn't feel nothing. I'd put the gun right there." (p.45)


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Explan ****<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">a ****<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">tion: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Candy's old dog id feeling pain because of the disease he has. The dog has no teeth, and feeling pain because of rheumatism. Carlson suggests Candy to kill that but when Candy says he can't, he tells he is going to shoot him behind dog's neck which won't give any pain to the dog.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Connection: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Killing the old dog won't give any pain to it and it will stop the dog's pain which will occur in the future. Carlson thinks killing the dog is benefit for the dog. Also, for the last concern, Carlson kills the dog without any pain.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Transition Sentence: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Carlson’s behavior and his last consideration are the reflection of Steinbeck’s idea of killing.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">__Body Paragraph 3:__ **


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Topic Sentence: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Unlike other characters who think killing for other people is acceptable, Curley accepts killing which is actually for himself.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Point: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Curley's killing is also acceptable, but it's acceptable in other way.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Evidence **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">: " I'm gonna shoot the guts outa that big bastard myself, even if I only got one hand. I'm gonna get 'im." (p.98)


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Explan ****<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">a ****<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">tion **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">: When people find out that Lennie killed Curley's wife's dead body, Curley gets mad. However, he is not mad about his wife's death, he is just mad about Lennie. The hatred exploded when he found Lennie touched his own property. Therefore, even Slim says Curley has to stay with his wife, he refuses to stay with his wife, and he actually goes to kill Lennie with enormous pain that he can give to Lennie. Shooting guts could be very painful, and as time goes, the pain will become harder, and harder. Curley wants to kill Lennie as painful as he can give.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Connection: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Even though the purpose of the killing is totally different from other characters, Curley also accepts the killing. His willing to kill Lennie is for ostentation his power, and for punishing the person who touched his own property. He is veridical person who wants to kill Lennie. However, he accepts his killing of Lennie, while he doesn’t accept Lenni’s killing. This shows that Curley accepts his killing, not other people who damages his reputation.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Transition Sentence: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> Although this seems to be very selfish, but it still reflects Steinbeck’s thinking.


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">__Conclusion:__ **


 * <span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;">Thesis: **<span style="font-family: '맑은 고딕'; font-size: 10pt;"> In conclusion, Slim, Carlson, and Curley are the characters who remarkably reflect Steinbeck’s thinking of killing. Steinbeck shows his idea of killing which is that some killing can be justified. Slim, Carlson kills dogs for protection of others, and also for not harming themselves. Unlike Slim and Carlson, Curley is radical person who is willing to kill somebody for his reputation and showing his ostentation. However, even though Slim, Carlson, and Curley’s idea of killing is different, all of them think killing is acceptable.

**<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 10pt;">Connection: **<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 10pt;"> Through these characters’ quotes and behaviors, Steinbeck’s conception of killing is receivable, is shown.